Charming Fiend

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Sunday, 18-Mar-2007 11:30:11

I hooked you with a single stare
it was over before it had begun.
like fallen prey you lay there
holding death in your hand.
You had a void I touched you there
with ease I kissed your hand.
There was devil in your despair
A devil at my command
What I brought,you were unaware
It was the best I had to give.
But all you took from our affair
are the fears you must relive.
But dont forget in your prayers
that all I did was make you bare
and to place the blame for your scare
it's in the mirror into which you must stare
Because I cannot invoke what was never there.

Post 2 by blbobby (Ooo you're gona like this!) on Sunday, 18-Mar-2007 15:30:43

I am totally surprised. This poem rhymes. But, that's my particular literary preference, and not your usual style.

I like the poem, it matches the title, and the last line brings us back down to earth and makes us look at ourselves.

Thanks, Goblin.

Bob

Post 3 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Monday, 19-Mar-2007 9:12:48

It rhymes far too often near the end but other than that it's ok
Cheers Bob.

Post 4 by jessmonsilva (Taking over the boards, one topic at a time.) on Monday, 19-Mar-2007 9:47:27

goblin i actually like this piece of work alot, it really stops and makes you think, take a deep look at yourself.

Post 5 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Monday, 19-Mar-2007 10:27:09

Cheers I think poetry is a more powerful medium for sparking introspection.